Bella Blossom (WIP)
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Re: Bella Blossom (WIP)
Thank you for doing what I asked.
zerowing21- Posts : 7958
Join date : 2013-06-15
Re: Bella Blossom (WIP)
Since I PMed this to you earlier, I will repost it here.
The age being changed is fine.
The appearance is fine.
Ethnicity just needs British, human is not needed
She can have more moves than that one power you have listed, but you have tell us if its low, medium or high power.
Strengths need a bit of work, like her dodging things. That can be said that she has heightened reflexes allowing her to dodge things a bit easier.
The second weakness of making her mad and pushing people into fusions, is more personality trait. Explain how its a weakness and you need a third weakness.
You need to expand her personality to at least employ negative traits. She needs more positives too, which I assume you are working on.
History just needs to be expanded to include her early life and what not.
Also, please do not try to make all strengths and weakness related to her autism.
The age being changed is fine.
The appearance is fine.
Ethnicity just needs British, human is not needed
She can have more moves than that one power you have listed, but you have tell us if its low, medium or high power.
Strengths need a bit of work, like her dodging things. That can be said that she has heightened reflexes allowing her to dodge things a bit easier.
The second weakness of making her mad and pushing people into fusions, is more personality trait. Explain how its a weakness and you need a third weakness.
You need to expand her personality to at least employ negative traits. She needs more positives too, which I assume you are working on.
History just needs to be expanded to include her early life and what not.
Also, please do not try to make all strengths and weakness related to her autism.
zerowing21- Posts : 7958
Join date : 2013-06-15
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